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  • Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

    Wrote this for my drummer, about his crazy, cracked out, ex wife this morning.



    More of a rough draft for the band to learn, but maybe you'll like it.
    Last edited by 80's_Metal; 07-04-2020, 08:51 PM.
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    Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

    I like it!

    Question about the vocals - which is my main hang up on your stuff, cookie style aside...


    Why so dry? No verb, no echo....Style intentional or no fx?

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    • #3
      Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

      I'm thinking that it's his style. And I like it.

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      • #4
        Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

        Is that Windows sound @3:17 intentional? Enjoyed it. The highlight is the 22 Acacia Avenue stuff starting @2:04.

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        • #5
          Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

          Originally posted by nexion218 View Post
          Is that Windows sound @3:17 intentional? Enjoyed it. The highlight is the 22 Acacia Avenue stuff starting @2:04.
          Ha ha it's the most amazing thing ever isn't it?
          I have no idea at all how that sound got into my mix!
          I'm going to go see right now!
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          • #6
            Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

            There's actually touch of chorus and a short slapback delay on vocals. I like the whole sepultura, short, dry, kind of vibe, so I kind of just go with that. I am no singer, certainly not good at mixing vocals yet. Learning as I go.
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            • #7
              Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

              Ok! I found the stupid windows sound! It was on the vocal track..... So.....maybe it bled thru my headphones? Maybe my laptop made a noise while I was recording the vocal track? Reaper software issue?
              Anyhow, fixed it.

              Also added reverb to the vocal track for you Bob.
              Not sure if I added the right type or amount.... Feedback welcomed.
              Last edited by 80's_Metal; 07-03-2020, 10:12 AM.
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              • #8
                Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

                I like that a lot better. I'd put it a little deeper in the mix now. Not too much...

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                • #9
                  Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

                  Originally posted by 80's_Metal View Post
                  Wrote this for my drummer, about his crazy, cracked out, ex wife this morning.



                  More of a rough draft for the band to learn, but maybe you'll like it.
                  Crazy and cracked out X?

                  Can I get her digits plz?
                  “For me, when everything goes wrong – that’s when adventure starts.” Yvonne Chouinard

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                  • #10
                    Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

                    Sounds good, like the chorus -nice guitar tones.

                    2 points of constructive criticism -If that's what you are looking for.

                    *C section seems slightly like an afterthought (assumed a guitar solo is going there) -maybe write some riffs or change the pace -break it up etc...

                    *I know your style here is using descriptors and aphorisms -but I think if you wanted to make anyone more interested in the song other than the riffs and beats -you could make people know why we should care about Carrie in the first place -establish what was worth being around her in the first place, and document her demise and how f*cked up she is now. Get the drummer drunk, and write down everything he says about the story arc of their relationship, then give the listener a reason to care. Giving the lyrics agency is the key to having a listener get vested.

                    for me personally, that's the difference between a good and a great song -
                    “For me, when everything goes wrong – that’s when adventure starts.” Yvonne Chouinard

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                    • #11
                      Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

                      Wow, that already made a ton of difference! I too would bring the vox down a tad in the mix and you've got a winner!

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                      • #12
                        Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

                        Also, it would be even more fortuitous if SCarrie Anne was from South Carolina. ****crosses fingers****
                        “For me, when everything goes wrong – that’s when adventure starts.” Yvonne Chouinard

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                        • #13
                          Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

                          Edited again.
                          Thanks for all the ideas guys, I enjoy feedback and learning more.

                          One of the biggest things I am working through is what speakers I am using to edit.... Studio monitors, studio headphones, computer speakers, different headphones.... All sound so totally different.... Working through all that.

                          Playback on a phone, or a car stereo, or a boombox.... All sounds so very different. Hard to find good neutrality.

                          So our idea for the lyrics were using only synonyms for the word hate. Simplistic I know, but that was our idea ha ha.

                          I don't know if she's from SC or not..... I'll ask.

                          Here's a conundrum though: our bassist has started a new career and won't be around much.... The drummers daughter plays bass and might very well be playing with us .... This song is about her mother! Tacky and tasteless.... I decided that I'm going to rename it Mary-Anne and then redo the vocals to match that ha ha ha... More to come.
                          Last edited by 80's_Metal; 07-04-2020, 08:55 AM.
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                            Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

                            Originally posted by 80's_Metal View Post
                            The drummers daughter plays bass and might very well be playing with us .... This song is about her mother! Tacky and tasteless.... I decided that I'm going to rename it Mary-Anne and then redo the vocals to match that ha ha ha... More to come.
                            You are a very decent man.

                            but you can do a big reveal in you VH1 behind the music episode!
                            “For me, when everything goes wrong – that’s when adventure starts.” Yvonne Chouinard

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                            • #15
                              Re: Morning garage jam. New song SCarrie Anne

                              Yeah, more like it, but... Could we try another singer?

                              JUST KIDDING! It rocks, really! Actually, my fave from you thus far!

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