Hey, I'm in the early stages of writing this mellow acoustic song I like to call Spring Breeze. Anyway, it's not done, the clip bassically has every idea I've thought of in it, so some things will probabally go, some things will probabally be repeated etc. in the final product. I'm bassically just looking for criticism on everything; the composition, the playing, the tone etc. The playing is a bit sloppy, and I plan on fixing that later. You can also hear my mom opening my door and talking to me for a bit, so that'll go too.
Also, if you have any suggestions on how to make it sound a bit more genuine/real, that would be greatly appreciated. I have some slight reverb and delay on it already, but it still doesn't sound all too great.
Spring Breeze
Most likely candidate for deletion so far would probabally be the little intervals from 11-14 seconds into the song, it's pretty akward and doesn't really fit into the song that well. I had originally thought it would be cool because it wasn't like the rest of the song and flowed into the Dmaj 7 chord well, but I don't think it sounds all that good now. Second most likely candidate would be the ending section, just too happy.
Thanks for any criticism/pointers,
Jacob
Also, if you have any suggestions on how to make it sound a bit more genuine/real, that would be greatly appreciated. I have some slight reverb and delay on it already, but it still doesn't sound all too great.
Spring Breeze
Most likely candidate for deletion so far would probabally be the little intervals from 11-14 seconds into the song, it's pretty akward and doesn't really fit into the song that well. I had originally thought it would be cool because it wasn't like the rest of the song and flowed into the Dmaj 7 chord well, but I don't think it sounds all that good now. Second most likely candidate would be the ending section, just too happy.
Thanks for any criticism/pointers,
Jacob
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