my 1st song post

[spuds]

Here's the 1st half of a song that I'm working on... please tell me what you guys think. Constructive critisism is welcome. =)
Its still kinda rough and a few parts need refinement.

http://members.iinet.net.au/~woon/tunecomp2.mp3

Thanks!

 

[mrid]

Damn! I was all prepared for something "rough," but this is too cool!

 

[Naps]

:notworthy Very nice.