A new EW song needs thoughts

[SpaceShipOne]

Just slapped this together, strickly worrying about the writing itself, not tone lol. Only done up to the point our singer needed.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=408886&songID=6699075

 

[Redmist]

Re: A new EW song needs thoughts

Sounding good.
If I had to make any thoughts on structure it would just be the phrasing at 1 min running to 1.30
You run 4 full phrases before changing, but 3 phrases running to 1.20 then changing might make it a snappier structure. Not a biggie or anything. Just my take and totally depends on the vocal as well.