new song with original lyrics

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This is freakin' cool! Your vocals sound slightly off key, but in a very good way.
It's extremely atmospheric, and your singing style fits the lyrics well.
Makes me think of something some cool late 60's band would have done.

I loved it!

I could do without the Jesus lyrics though, especially the line "I've met Jesus" which just makes me think of this:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DnETYe5-GTE
 
Re: new song with original lyrics

very simple, but also quite good for your age! keep it up. Next add drums, bass, and less monotony. or not.
 
Re: new song with original lyrics

This is freakin' cool! Your vocals sound slightly off key, but in a very good way.
It's extremely atmospheric, and your singing style fits the lyrics well.
Makes me think of something some cool late 60's band would have done.

I loved it!

I could do without the Jesus lyrics though, especially the line "I've met Jesus" which just makes me think of this:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DnETYe5-GTE

thanks bro. means a lot


and as far as the jesus thing...I was debating whether or not to put it in....I decided to do it b/c its not about loving jesus or anything like that....I was talking more about an idealistic life with religion that works I guess...I'll probably take it out...or something

and thats the exact modd I was going for...atmospheric 60s ish...yea
 
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it has lots of potential but the production is holding it back quite a bit. The guitar sounds really indistinct, which is great for building that sonic atmosphere but i think you should add another track with a clearer guitar over that, perhaps an acoustic? of course you can mix them so that one doesnt overpower the other :)

i like where you are going with the vocals but there are times where they are peaky. Keep in mind that whenever you change your volume you should adjust your position from the mic accordingly, so on those louder parts you should back away a bit. i also felt that they were too upfront for the most part. maybe on the next take you could add some compression as well

its a good start with some heart in it, but you should definitely tighten it up so that it really shines and is more listenable! keep it up, and i really hate criticising someone else's work so feel free to bash me in any way you feel is appropriate
 
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Great stuff. You don't have to edit out stuff just because one person doesn't like it, it's up to you.
 
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Fair enough. The fuzz is kind of cool, what is it?

lol, I just plugged the guitar into my USB interface and recorded into audacity. the fuzz was a half rectification fuzz. I panned that slightly and then put the clean in the other ear
 
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lol, I just plugged the guitar into my USB interface and recorded into audacity. the fuzz was a half rectification fuzz. I panned that slightly and then put the clean in the other ear
Hahaha interesting. I noticed it had a 'square' digital type fuzz, I thought it was one of your whacky stomp boxes or something.
 
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