Is this a song idea worth messing with?

[SeraphimTN]

I had the creative flow so I slapped a mic up n recorded this idea....far from good playing. I already think that the begninning should be staccato then go into a smoother version of it. the run from chord to chord i like, just need to practice that...not real easy but not hard. Ideas are welcome! Oh btw, this is the marshall cab, not hughes.
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=408886&songID=4895147